Tribal Bluefly Collaboration
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By ExoticHippieQueen ©2011
pull me out of this wreck
no one knows
im already on life support
the hair's standing up
on the back of my
neck.
the tribal bluefly collaboration
watches me with hollow eyes
and breathes heavy sighs
its no surprise.
did i say that they often tell lies?
They notice my scratch and claw
up the down ramp
but yawn in benign boredom
while snatching their own
from thin air and
eating them whole, and buzzing,
blueflies with ground pepper.
made me sneeze.
as rare as a white truffle
hidden, buried in mossy hills
true understanding and unconditional love
remain elusive spectres.
this exhausts me.
the empty places in the
alphawaves of
my mind
slowly fill with visions and dreams
of my pink and white Schwinn bike,
and the little bird that I
cared for that
hung itself so very accidentally
in the v of a branch
during a high wind
while i was at school.
this is too hard
life's deck of cards
filled with jokers and jacks
and stampeding horses,
coconut palms and the
smiles of sweet aunts,
a little red corvette,
our matching poodle skirts,
skating on stadium ice,
goodbye to my love,
and dancing drunk
on a bowling machine
that was once upon a time.
the tribal bluefly collaboration
elaborates and always collaborates
on the hows and whys
the lows and highs
of the passing of life
push and pull of the strife.
make me get off the floor
can't keep this up anymore
i'm on life support (!)
please just show me the door
or pull me an ace,
bluefly.
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That's awesome! Voted up and everything but funny.
Susan54 and RealHousewife, thanks for reading and leaving great comments! Happy Holidays to both of you and your loves ones..........
Great poem love it. Voted the same as Realhousewife.
Thank you, writer 20. I appreciate you reading and commenting.
That's quite a piece of work. Imagery entwined with emotion accompanied by your melody.
Thanks, mckbirdbks. Good to hear from you. How are things? Glad you enjoyed this poem. Thanks for commenting.
Hi ExoticHipieQueen
"as rare as a white truffle hidden, buried in mossy hills
true understanding and unconditional love remain elusive spectres.
this exhausts me."
Beautiful, deep and profound.
Voted up and away!
Thank you, Sueswan............how are you? A Merry Christmas and a Happy New Year to you and yours!
This poem is amazingly awesome just like you :)
I am well ExoticHippieQueen and hope all is well with you.
A Merry Christmas and Happy New Year to you and your family!
Ah, Sweet Sunshine.............the feelings are mutual. Hugs and kisses to you.
Sueswan, thank you!
ExoticHippieQueen, The beat, context, images and words all work in this bittersweet, ironic poem! In particular, I like the impact of the repeated words and phrases and the combined words which begin with the same letters or sounds.
Thank you for sharing, voted up + all,
Derdriu
P.S. It also would make a great song!
Great piece of work. Very well done my friend.
Merry Christmas to you and your family and a very Happy New Year.
Best Wishes, Kamalesh
Thank you, Kamalesh050. I appreciate your comment. Merry Christmas to you and yours, too!
exotic, this is wonderful. Loved it. Up and shared
This was so incredible and deep! I had to read twice. Found myself finding several meanings deep within..
Really wonderful.
Sunnie
PDXCaraokeGuy, I'm glad that you enjoyed it, and especially that you shared it! Thank you............Sunnie Day, you read it TWICE? Love that! I was really rooting around in neglected areas of my memories to package this up. You just never know when the tribal bluefly collaboration will make an appearance and do a running commentary and judgment on your life..........
nice pic!
Thanks, Ashna. My son who is a gifted photographer took this picture in a forest preserve near my house. There is an eerie sadness, I think, in this picture, and rightly so. A man shot himself in the mouth and died in these woods a few years ago. I always feel the vibe when I pass by. Kevin just seemed to capture the mood in this picture.
hmmm ..Ur son is a gud photographer really appreciate him:)
Thank youo, ashna.......I will pass the compliment along. Thanks for reading and following..
exotic, my pleasure to share!
susan54 Level 4 Commenter 5 months ago
HippieQueen, Very good job, I love it. And You look very very in your picture. HAPPY HOLIDAYS.