Through the Window, Not the Door
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By ExoticHippieQueen ©2011
It was the Lottery~
But not the game~
The biker bar~
He was the star~
There's-only-me-to-blame-this-isn't-tame-i-let-it-go-too-far.
With long brown hair~
His name was Ben~
The lowlife type~
I’m only guess'n~
But-even-then-i-chose-bad-men-i-had-to-learn-my-little-lesson.
His devil eyes~
Burnt holes in mine~
Made wisps of smoke~
Curl from my ears~
His-biker-stuff-it-was-so-rough-but-not-enough-to-heed-my-early-fears.
He had this gun~
The first I’d seen~
Except in books~
It scared me half to death~
He-kept-it-in-my-linen-closet-like-an-evil-safe-deposit-with-pills-and-puff-they took-my-breath.
He drove me to~
The farmer’s fields~
So I could ride~
The owner’s horse~
While-he-played-out-all-his-deals-and-turned-the-rusty-wheels-his-evil-nature-took-its-course.
He slapped my face~
So dirty hard~
He made it turn~
The other way~
And-from-that-moment-on-the-game-was-gone-time-for-me-to-fly-away.
It should have died~
Right then and there~
But that would be~
An end too right~
Thru-the-window-not-the-door-he-took-me-to-the-floor-in-the-middle-of-the-night.
I couldn’t make~
A single sound~
But I fought back~
With all my might~
My-babys-sleeping-in-his-bed-protect-his-head-he's-safe-upstairs-and-out-of-sight.
He was a legend~
In his own crime~
On the news~
I heard it break~
He-stabbed-some-partygirl-it-rocked-my-very-world-i-still-went-on-to-make-so-many-more-mistakes………………………
“Life is a silver chain of moments, each link connected to the next, some shiny, some tarnished, bridging the remembered past to the hopeful future.”
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I'll add that even the title drives home the point, as well as the picture.
I love it. I sure can relate to that poem. I believe I can learn a lot from your writings. You've got my vote.
very nice. love it.
poems with hyphen coating. good exotic poem ,i liked , it do has a silver linings. voted up
loved reading this ... def a vote up from me :)
Great poem on the dark side. Love it. upup
Very intriguing poem! love it!
magical words and the title really intrigued me and made me want to read more. Ace pic at the top too! Well done x
well done -- you have a deep message and you explore the depths with an openness and clarity. Cool work
Gambling with the bad boys might be exciting for awhile until their deception is uncovered and heartbreak results.
Voted up and awesome.
Wow. One of a kind. Great write.
EHQ,
I really like this piece. Very vivid and telling. I mostly like your ending quote! You never really know what people have been through in their life. And yes, I understand that even though something should be "eye opening" - we still make similar mistakes.
Sharyn
Wow ! Excellent---Love your style!
YOU are AMAZING!!! I adore this poem!!!
This is AWESOME, beautiful and UP!
This is a minds-eye-view of rough relationships. The last lines, with the hyphens, tell a story, if you only read those. Quite the amazing style of writing! I really really LOVE this.
Glad I stopped by, I will continue reading your writes!
Thank YOU!!
Stupid Ben! really nice words, love the way you linked it back to other hubs... Super writer voted up























Victoria Lynn Level 8 Commenter 9 months ago
Wow, voted up. Dark, descriptive, yet awesome, if that makes sense. Love the final phrases in each stanza with the hyphens. All thrown together thoughts...drives it all home. Well done.