Through the Window, Not the Door

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By ExoticHippieQueen

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By ExoticHippieQueen ©2011



It was the Lottery~

But not the game~

The biker bar~

He was the star~

There's-only-me-to-blame-this-isn't-tame-i-let-it-go-too-far.


With long brown hair~

His name was Ben~

The lowlife type~

I’m only guess'n~

But-even-then-i-chose-bad-men-i-had-to-learn-my-little-lesson.


His devil eyes~

Burnt holes in mine~

Made wisps of smoke~

Curl from my ears~

His-biker-stuff-it-was-so-rough-but-not-enough-to-heed-my-early-fears.


He had this gun~

The first I’d seen~

Except in books~

It scared me half to death~

He-kept-it-in-my-linen-closet-like-an-evil-safe-deposit-with-pills-and-puff-they took-my-breath.


He drove me to~

The farmer’s fields~

So I could ride~

The owner’s horse~

While-he-played-out-all-his-deals-and-turned-the-rusty-wheels-his-evil-nature-took-its-course.


He slapped my face~

So dirty hard~

He made it turn~

The other way~

And-from-that-moment-on-the-game-was-gone-time-for-me-to-fly-away.


It should have died~

Right then and there~

But that would be~

An end too right~

Thru-the-window-not-the-door-he-took-me-to-the-floor-in-the-middle-of-the-night.


I couldn’t make~

A single sound~

But I fought back~

With all my might~

My-babys-sleeping-in-his-bed-protect-his-head-he's-safe-upstairs-and-out-of-sight.


He was a legend~

In his own crime~

On the news~

I heard it break~

He-stabbed-some-partygirl-it-rocked-my-very-world-i-still-went-on-to-make-so-many-more-mistakes………………………


“Life is a silver chain of moments, each link connected to the next, some shiny, some tarnished, bridging the remembered past to the hopeful future.”


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Victoria Lynn Level 8 Commenter 9 months ago

Wow, voted up. Dark, descriptive, yet awesome, if that makes sense. Love the final phrases in each stanza with the hyphens. All thrown together thoughts...drives it all home. Well done.

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Victoria Lynn Level 8 Commenter 9 months ago

I'll add that even the title drives home the point, as well as the picture.

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ExoticHippieQueen Hub Author 9 months ago

Thank you, Victoria, for your comments. Much appreciated!

SheliaKay 9 months ago

I love it. I sure can relate to that poem. I believe I can learn a lot from your writings. You've got my vote.

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michael_michelle1 9 months ago

very nice. love it.

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ExoticHippieQueen Hub Author 9 months ago

michael_michelle1 and sheilakay, thank you very much for coming by and leaving me your thoughts.

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VENZKHVAM 9 months ago

poems with hyphen coating. good exotic poem ,i liked , it do has a silver linings. voted up

kaceybabe 9 months ago

loved reading this ... def a vote up from me :)

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writer20 Level 8 Commenter 9 months ago

Great poem on the dark side. Love it. upup

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Terishere Level 4 Commenter 9 months ago

Very intriguing poem! love it!

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mandypoole Level 1 Commenter 9 months ago

magical words and the title really intrigued me and made me want to read more. Ace pic at the top too! Well done x

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ExoticHippieQueen Hub Author 9 months ago

VENZKHVAM, kaceybabe, writer20, Terishere, and mandypoole, thank you love ladies and gentleman, for your kind words and encouragement!

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Neil Sperling Level 5 Commenter 9 months ago

well done -- you have a deep message and you explore the depths with an openness and clarity. Cool work

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ExoticHippieQueen Hub Author 9 months ago

Thank you, Neil. I appreciate your comment!

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Sueswan Level 8 Commenter 9 months ago

Gambling with the bad boys might be exciting for awhile until their deception is uncovered and heartbreak results.

Voted up and awesome.

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Pollyannalana 9 months ago

Wow. One of a kind. Great write.

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ExoticHippieQueen Hub Author 9 months ago

Thank you, Pollyannalana, for your nice comment! Glad you stopped by.

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Sharyn's Slant Level 7 Commenter 8 months ago

EHQ,

I really like this piece. Very vivid and telling. I mostly like your ending quote! You never really know what people have been through in their life. And yes, I understand that even though something should be "eye opening" - we still make similar mistakes.

Sharyn

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ExoticHippieQueen Hub Author 8 months ago

Sharyn, thank you for reading this and your thought-filled comments. Yeah, always more mistakes............

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Lisa Luv Level 2 Commenter 8 months ago

Wow ! Excellent---Love your style!

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ExoticHippieQueen Hub Author 8 months ago

Thank you so much! I'm glad you enjoyed it.

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Sunshine625 Level 8 Commenter 8 months ago

YOU are AMAZING!!! I adore this poem!!!

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ExoticHippieQueen Hub Author 8 months ago

I take that as a serious compliment, Ms. Sunshine! Thanks loads!

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Barbara Turpin Level 3 Commenter 8 months ago

This is AWESOME, beautiful and UP!

This is a minds-eye-view of rough relationships. The last lines, with the hyphens, tell a story, if you only read those. Quite the amazing style of writing! I really really LOVE this.

Glad I stopped by, I will continue reading your writes!

Thank YOU!!

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ExoticHippieQueen Hub Author 8 months ago

Thank you, Barbara. I'm so glad that you enjoyed it. I actually enjoyed writing it because it's always very cathartic.

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icciev 7 months ago

Stupid Ben! really nice words, love the way you linked it back to other hubs... Super writer voted up

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ExoticHippieQueen Hub Author 7 months ago

Thank you, icciev! I appreciate your comment!

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